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augmented man's avatar

Your poem beautifully captures silent struggle and the hope that follows. Thank you for giving voice to hidden pain and reminding us that joy can bloom again

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Rolando Andrade's avatar

Thank you @augmented man. I a Psychotherapist, so i am used to deal with this material

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Mark Cooley's avatar

Making the Dream

I watch the dawn come slowly

Past the morning star

The shortest day of winter past

Red sky fading to the lightest of blues

Blues in a minor key

If I were a shepherd, I would give a lamb

If I were a wise man, I would do my part

Deer cross the yard

Stepping carefully through the snow

Thoroughly studying the way

Then running, small hooves kicking up puffs of snow

Light growing

Until I can see the frost

Dusting the brush along the property line

Making the dream unnecessary

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augmented man's avatar

Hey Mark, your poem is so lovely! It's like you've given us all a gift of a new day, and every line is like a warm, soft breath of wonder.

Keep on lighting up the world for us!

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Scott McConnaha's avatar

Thanks for this invitation! And thanks for your site here. I've begun a publication where I post my poems and reflections on striving for an attentive, creative life. https://hoppingoffhere.substack.com/

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Sharon Hom's avatar

@augmented man, In lieu of a poem — for now. Just a heart note to you, in deep appreciation for the way your writing always opens up more space. What is truly impressive is your generous reading of each poem shared here, honoring the specificity of each voice. As I am struggling now to write amidst the destruction engulfing our worlds, thank you for this hopeful community building vision🙏♥️

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Sharon Hom's avatar

🙏🙏🙏♥️♥️♥️💪🏻 As we used to say during the 2019 Democracy protests in HK, yes. Add Oil! 加油And we didn’t mean “ drill baby drill” but the fuel of our human spirits and actions!

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augmented man's avatar

Sharon, I hold your heart note gently,

May we continue finding the courage to write through these tumultuous winds, and in doing so, discover again the warmth of community and the promise of what we can build, side by side.

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Lilith Dahlia's avatar

This is one I wrote in mid May of 2024. I read it, I stumbled upon it today, and it reads, as all things do, as a new perspective that feels much like looking back upon a chapter year just as I begin the next. In a sense, it is a commemoration of the space between us, the last time, the first time, and the next time, and the ever present hope that it will one day realize that it does not exist as an x-y plane, but rather, as a drop of blood, dropped swirling into an ever shifting ocean of perpetual motion. In order to stay afloat in any flood, you have to be willing to become the water itself, as even the strongest of ships will one day wash ashore like any other driftwood, and become something new. Again

Famine and Fiend

When Famine and Fiend

Reconvened

At The Feast,

Each recounted their efforts

From greatest, to least.

The Fiend, deftly grasping at

Straws to do lines

Of the last one it crossed

To invade the sound mind.

While The Famine explained

What succumbed to its will,

Was withdrawal of the brain

from a powder or pill.

When examined at depth

That has known ocean floors,

Fiend looks just like Famine;

Both dying for “More.”

Yet the inverse of that,

Undefined by a name

For the sick fearful lust that began as a game.

In a physical sense:

The inevitable fate

of the weight

of the want

of the thing

that we hate.

Famine and Fiend

Finally clean

Picked the bones

Of the unwary weary ones

They had called home

Ever-driven by want festering into need

That evades principle,

Is mistaken for greed,

Is a plague on the lives of the ones it observes,

While considering which hors d'oeuvres they should serve.

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augmented man's avatar

Lilith, your piece holds a raw view of how craving can devour from within. It reflects on that delicate shift when a want becomes an urgent pull. Truly striking work.

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Otto Angus Anderson's avatar

Today I heard you humming

Your private little hymn

I marvelled you were mine

In the beam of light

As it washed you out

A glow that warmed my eyes

And warmed me from within

This moment

This memory

That moved me so

That I'll miss you

This

I surely know

Now all I have of you

Is now and then

If I caress you in my mind

The scent and sight returns

I catch a crumb to savour

When I think back on the time

When I heard you humming

Your private little hymn

And I marvel you were mine

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augmented man's avatar

Otto, your lines brightened my day with gentle grace.

They lift the spirit, stirring reflection and gratitude in equal measure.

Thank you.

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💧Mike Stacey's avatar

I love the “feel” of poetry and the compression of meaning at times. I am working on a collection of poems celebrating all the aspects of yin yang. Here is one called “Meet Yin Yang”:

A hill, any hill

anchored solidly

upon this spinning earth

Its side facing east

yang side

full of light

Its other side

yin side

full of dark

The hill remains

the hill

its shades

its light and dark

defines it

The daily rotation

earth toward sun

reverses the hills

yin and yang

Each side contains

the potential

of its opposite

yin in yang

yang in yin

cycling each day

with earth spin

its base mobile

all in balance

You may find more about me on my blog https://stacesplace.blog/ and my Substack here,

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augmented man's avatar

Thanks for sharing, Mike, this piece beautifully shows how dark and light shape each other, keeping us all in motion and balance

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Leon Brown, Jr.'s avatar

Not much to say about my poetry. But I enjoy sharing it, and you can find it on my Substack posts, if you're interested or curious........

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augmented man's avatar

Your poetry always warms the heart, Leon. Thank you for sharing!

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Leon Brown, Jr.'s avatar

Thanks immensely for the response! I’m looking forward to exploring yours…

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maryan's avatar

Thanks for including me in this community. I'm about to launch my community on Monday and I was cruising the site to feel the vibe when I came across your community ;)

These are a few lines I wrote while thinking about what it means to be connected to everything and how I can relate to that as a (creative) person. It is now my life motto.

"Between the line of my pencil

And the stroke of my brush

There is no difference.

Between the gesture formed by my hand

And what is not yet expressed

There is no difference."

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augmented man's avatar

Between gesture and silence, the essence of all that is unseen flows freely. Beautiful words, Maryan, as if the soul murmurs through the void.

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maryan's avatar

Thanks for your comment!

I think striving for that is the growth path of “living beings with reflexive minds” ;)

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augmented man's avatar

So beautifully put, Maryan! It warms my heart

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Terry Chapman's avatar

Am writing a haiku book….slowly!

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Terry Chapman's avatar

Haiku remind us with their brief crisp wordings, that we are merely visitors on our swirling planet Earth

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augmented man's avatar

Thank you for your thoughtful reflection, Terry

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Terry Chapman's avatar

My original poem

Out my window

Ice held tree

Captives of the season

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Charlie Beaumont's avatar

I am reading at the moment a number of poets. Fleur Adcock, Abigail Parry, Fiona Bennett, Sylvia Plath, DH Lawrence and listening to various Poetry Podcasts

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augmented man's avatar

Poetry enriches our shared language and thoughts—thank you for sharing, Charlie

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Charlie Beaumont's avatar

I totally agree with you. I love the feeling I get when I lock into a poem and relate genuinely to its emotional resonance. Thanks so much for replying.

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Ellie Thompson's avatar

Thank you for this opportunity to share my work and read the truly lovely words of other writers!

I write haikus and free verse in my notes and long form essays and stories in my posts - Ellie Thompson - Everyday Adventures

Soft, sweet waves today

Catching the sun with each rise

Geese swim in a row

https://substack.com/@elliethompson/note/c-69669107?r=tvyhb&utm_medium=ios&utm_source=notes-share-action

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augmented man's avatar

What a lovely and calming piece, Ellie. Your words create such a serene and gentle scene.

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Charlee's avatar

She sits in her room after school

Thinking about how she wished she could be cool

Nobody cared about her

She was just another person, another blur

She hides deep inside

She can't find her way out

She constantly tries

But she constantly fails

Not knowing when this will end

She keeps going

Staying strong for her friends

Hiding her true self

She always comes to school with a smile

But she feels like she's walking miles

Nobody cares

Nobody listens

She screams inside in pain

She won't reach out for help

Her mom slowly dying

But she as well is dying on the inside

She doesn't have a purpose

She is constantly feeling worthless

It feels as if she lives in a circus

Everything and everybody going a thousand miles an hour

But sometimes she wishes she could jump from the tower

Scolding hot showers

To burn away the pain

Chewing gum to feel less hungry

She wishes she wasn't angry

She hates herself

She was only twelve

Twelve and diagnosed with something that isn't scared to affect many others

She's now fifteen

She wants to feel like a queen

But everybody was way too mean

She has a guy that likes her

She is constantly asking why he cares

He said "because I love you"

Those words hit her hard

She has never heard them before

Because her heart was always being torn apart

Depression kills

Anxiety scares

She wishes she was normal

But she will never change

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augmented man's avatar

Charlee, thank you for sharing this deeply moving poem. I am struck by your courage and honesty in illuminating an inner experience so many struggle with yet hide in isolation.

Perhaps within revealing shared frailties lies community's seed; in naming darkness comes light.

Your gift is a gesture of healing.

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