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Martin  Lieber's avatar

...with all due respect, this is not a poem, it is a prose piece, a brief, heartfelt essay. While I admire and share the passion expressed, I acknowledge that it lacks the necessary elements of structure and device that distinguishes poetry from pose. Poets choose from a wide variety of these, such as rhyme, meter, assonance, dissonance, alliteration, deliberate, unconventional word and line spacing to invite the reader to re-construct the journey of the poet's own personal transformative experience.

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augmented man's avatar

Dear Martin,

thank you for sharing your thoughts, I appreciate your feedback. It was an intense experience to write this poem and I have to say that it is a true reflection of the heart and soul. I hope you enjoy the poem and please feel free to share with others, or quote. Thank you again

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Didier Hope's avatar

I’m glad you feel it so much. You are beautiful. I am glad you can see the stars at night and that you’re ready to fly among them.

~"I'm just a girl who tuned out the world and took my time to explore it"~

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augmented man's avatar

Thank you. I don’t know what it is, but I feel like we have a connection.

"To touch the stars, you have to reach for the sky"

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Eva Rtology's avatar

It has now been three months since I first read your incredible poem. I hope you are well and happy. Your words were incredibly inspiring for me, and I find myself quoting them often ("I know my life is a weather report..."). You must be a very wise person, because you have somehow managed to capture the essence of reality in your poem : )

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augmented man's avatar

Eva, It was very nice to read your comment. I'm happy you enjoyed the poem. Yours is a very astute interpretation of it.

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